Progressive Poem Day 7


I am so honoured to be joining the progressive poem yet again. It is turning out to be my favorite so far. I hope I don’t stuff it up. This is what we have got so far:

She lives without a net, walking along the alluvium deposits of the delta.
Shoes swing over her shoulder, on her bare feet stick jeweled flecks of dark mica.
Hands faster than fish swing at the ends of bare brown arms. Her hair flows,
snows in wild wind as she digs in the
indigo varnished handbag,
pulls out her grandmother’s oval cuffed bracelet,
strokes the turquoise stones, and steps through the curved doorway.
No pressure there then. Teleporting is so my thing 😉
Okay I love how worldy and outer-wordly this poem is and the fabulous vocabulary we have so far. It looks like we need to have some urgency, an adventure, a problem perhaps. Maybe not all in my line though. I love how we are near water with the delta business so rather than going to another world through the stone I’m going below.
Let’s see…
Tripping on her tail she slips hair first down the slide… splash!
I am naughty putting splash. Irene is forced into the water, but will it be a pool or the sea? You’ll have to stop by our lovely poetic host, Irene’s blog tomorrow to find out.
Sorry this is so late!
Have a great day!

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27 responses to “ Progressive Poem Day 7 ”

  1. Happy Poetry Month, Catherine! Ha – When I first read this, as it appears on my screen, it seemed “No pressure there then. Teleporting is so my thing” was your added line. Then I figured out your line was the slide/tail first one, setting up a splashy segue for Irene. Where is our tailed character going, with her grandmother’s bracelet, and now evidently all wet? (This will be quite the challenge for me by next week, I’m sure, since I’m most comfortable with haiku!) ;0)

  2. Irene Latham says:

    Thank you for that splash, Catherine. 🙂 Just to clarify, this is your line:
    Tripping on her tail she slips hair first down the slide… splash!”
    Or is it the teleporting line ?? Thank you!

  3. Ramona says:

    And I thought Charles’s curve ball with the handbag was challenging . . . now I can’t wait for Irene’s response.

    • says:

      She’s probably thumbing through a water thesaurus lol. I do hope we stay in the water for a bit, but who knows.

  4. Donna Smith says:

    I kind of liked the teleporting line! Ha! Now that would be quite a topsy-turvey curvy! Though tripping on her tail opens it up to lots of questions. I’m just glad it isn’t my turn…

    • says:

      Me too if it isn’t to space. I can never seem to write about space. I know I’m safe with Irene after me. She’ll rise to the challenge. I’m glad I’m not after me 😉

  5. Tabatha says:

    Fascinating poem this year! Fun to watch it develop 🙂

  6. Oooweee! You have set up a challenge for Irene, since you changed up the mood and the character and yet kept it mystical, if she’s a mermaid. But your line also brought to mind an image of a girl in a mermaid bathing suit at a water park…though I guess that wouldn’t really go with the first several lines. Or is she not a human girl? Ack! You have thrown a monkey wrench into this scene for me, Catherine–good luck, Irene! Heehee.

    Also, thanks for restoring my short line. I think each poet’s line should stay on one line, so Charles’ would be: “indigo varnished handbag, pulls out her grandmother’s oval cuffed bracelet,” because otherwise we’re sorta saying, “OK, write as long as you want and we’ll just make multiple lines out of it.” The real cooperative challenge here, to me, is to add one line and ONLY one line, which means you can’t dictate the overall direction of the poem much, just contribute to it one small step at a time. And line breaks are important… But then again, I’m a stickler for rules once they’ve been set up. I guess if nobody else cares, it doesn’t matter a bit! But thanks for putting my line back on its own.

    This is like the best improv game ever. And all I can say is, I’m glad I went early on!

    • says:

      You were right to have each as it was intended. When you can’t dictate where the poem goes much you want your own line left alone. I hope mine doesn’t stick out like a sore thumb. I trust Irene to make it make sense.

  7. Linda Baie says:

    Catherine, you’ve moved us again, & now we will all wait to see what this continuing-to-be-interesting character will do in water. Fun line!

  8. haitiruth says:

    She can’t be a mermaid, because we’ve already seen her feet. So she has feet, and arms, and a tail… This is getting interesting! 🙂

    • says:

      Aha but she went through a portal so she could have had a costume change at the other end 😉

  9. amyludwigvanderwater says:

    Splash! We’re off into a new place with our mysterious being! It is great fun watching the poem grow – and to think that she’s not even a third the way there. I wonder what she is thinking about all of this…

  10. “No pressure there then. Teleporting is so my thing” HAHA! I’m with you there, Catherine! At least you left the zombies at home. 😉 I love the new meaning you gave “strokes the turquoise stones” with your magical, transformative line!

    • says:

      And I didn’t even notice that lol. Yes thank goodness zombies didn’t come into that. That would have been a bit radical.

  11. This is pretty cool!

    All this poem needs is a line about a guy from Nantucket. All the truly great poems out there are about men from Nantucket.

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  13. I’m catching up, Catherine! Fun line! I’m wanting to see where Splash takes us!